Fiona نوشته:

wow; wt a lucky guy!!

Yeah.. I think I could consider myself pretty lucky, not so many people get the chance to sleep with their first love in life.

Fiona نوشته:

I don't get it..is that so awful?!! :e405:LOL

well kinda :)
I could point out your mistakes if you like, you rather do a fine job and I like ur writing style too, but it's just some silly mistakes here and there, for instance,

- "... coz I had supposed to eat full dinner in my fav restaurant ..."

this is well just plain wrong in so many ways :) the proper way to say it would be:
- "... coz I was supposed to eat a full dinner in my fav"

even better:
- "... coz I was supposed to have a night out dinner in my fav"


and there we go, what's it with so many iranians mistaking 'any' and 'all' with one another?

- "restaurant but he messed up all my plan"

all = همه
any = هر

your sentence would be translated as:
- ولی او همه نقشه منو بهم زد.

which is okayyyyy to some extend, but not quite so, you should say
- ولی او همه‌ی نقشه‌های منو بهم زد
or
- ولی او همه‌ی نقشه‌ی منو بهم زد

remember:
Hameye naqšeye mano (all of my plan) ≠ Hame naqšeye mano (all my plan)


This is indeed a bad habit among iranians to use unagreeabale nouns and verbs:

- "فشانه‌های خون خیابان را فرا میگیرد"


It's 100% wrong, the verb (میگیرد) must be in agreement with the noun, i.e. pluralized:

- "فشانه‌های خون خیابان را فرا میگیرند"


so back to your sentence, it must be:
- "but he messed up all my plans"

or
- "but he messed up all of my plan [for the night]"


Should I keep correcting or that's enough Fiona? :)